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No 'Coming Up Next' this week because we'll be playing catch-up with Quiet Place 2 this Friday and the new Trials and Tribulations the Friday after that.
I'll take this opportunity to ask you a question, though: Where'd ya heard of me?
No 'Coming Up Next' this week because we'll be playing catch-up with Quiet Place 2 this Friday and the new Trials and Tribulations the Friday after that.
I'll take this opportunity to ask you a question, though: Where'd ya heard of me?
Hey there!
Wanted to give some critique. Not meant as an insult or demand, just feedback.
It feels like you've gradually losing some of the intensity by not exploring or detailing the steps and consequences of each action in your stories.
So, a lot of your stories previously contained loops that went like "anticipation-action-consequence-consequence-(repeat from anticipation)", and a lot of the ones now seem to read more like "action-consequence-action-consequence" or just "action-action-action-action", which makes the impact of actions really light, like reading off a list rather than really being there with the players. Plus, it makes it so the actions are disconnected rather than feeding into each other to raise the intensity.
Example: Read "Side effects" (the one about selling drugs which raise libido then legally having to deal with the consequences), then read "carrot and stick" - which is rammed full of ideas but doesn't really sit with any of them.
Don't take this as a big criticism, though, your work is still very good and plenty inventive.
I thought I'd first found you when searching older stories on Reddit and finding "The Daily Grind" but when I started looking through your profile I realized I'd been reading a bunch of your more recent stuff without ever paying attention to the author.
P.S. Don't push yourself too hard though! Get well soon!